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Language Application

Discussion in 'Reviewed Applications' started by Lotioned, Oct 12, 2019 at 11:18 PM.

  1. Lotioned

    Lotioned Venezuela Level 0

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    IGN: Lotioned
    Language your character knows: Italian
    How does your character know this language?

    Francesco Concord was born in Venice, Italy, He'd live there since he was born but he moved out to Japan with part of his family when he had 10 years because his mom died in a car accident. He started to attend to the Karakura Highschool and struggling to speak the new language.
     
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  2. Shizai

    Shizai United States Level 100

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    Shizai
    Denied!

    Thank you for applying for a language, however it seems a little rushed and it's only around two-three sentences already, I don't see anything in this that makes it stand out. I'd like a little more information, edit it a bit and then re-apply. Some changes I expect to see made are on the sentence structure, "when he had 10 years" also "attend to the Karakura Highschool and struggling" I really want to see your work on the sentence structure because it honestly makes this really confusing to read. Good luck with your new application!