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Winters
Level 18
I gotchu.
When you detailRP, try to describe features of your character, or how they appear / look DOING the thing they're doing. You also try to make the action seem as vivid as possible—even if you are describing minute/insignificant things. DetailRPing is similar to imagery in a book. Or, if you do it wrong, it would just be pure slop.
An example of a vague action:
John Doe punched the Berry Allen impersonator in the face. -> Sure, in non-P2L combat, this would be a good action. But if you want to DetailRP (Usually for P2L in this scenario, you have to describe what he is doing before and after the punch (without double-actioning) and how the punch looked, and felt, and what would happen if it connected)
A better action would be:
John doe licked his lips, quickly winding his arm back, and landing a clean punch to the kid in the flash suit's face, causing a sharp tingling sensation, and throbbing ache, as well as immediate redness if the hit landed. John then smiled, and shook off his hand, a sharp pain shooting through his knuckles. (The 'if the hit landed' part was courtesy, and means that there is no PowerRP going on.)
Why is this better though? Firstly, it adds some more detail to John's punch, and describes the effects of the punch, what John Doe feels after, and what he does before. But this is still not perfect.
An even better action would be:
John Doe licked his lips, the coppery tang of his own blood overwhelming his senses. He hadn't noticed his broken nose, which was starting to throb. His eyes widened, and he stared at the Flash impersonator, glaring daggers at him, his Jade eyes so filled with rage they looked like they were going to pop out at any second. He took a breath, wiping the blood off his face, before quickly winding his arm back and shooting it at the Flash Impersonator's cheek. His fist would connect with a sharp crack, causing the Flash Impersonator to feel an immediate throb in his face, which would be sore if the hit connected. He pulled his hand back, shaking the pain out, which came in waves. 'Tch' he muttered, his knuckles bloodied and bruised.
This action is (of course) not perfect, but paints a way better picture. There is a ton of information provided on exactly where his fist hits, and the effect of the punch. It also is very vivid, and describes smell, sight, feeling and uses forms of descriptive imagery to really fluff up the action.
I bolded the parts that make the attack dodgeable (for some reason)
When you detailRP, try to describe features of your character, or how they appear / look DOING the thing they're doing. You also try to make the action seem as vivid as possible—even if you are describing minute/insignificant things. DetailRPing is similar to imagery in a book. Or, if you do it wrong, it would just be pure slop.
An example of a vague action:
John Doe punched the Berry Allen impersonator in the face. -> Sure, in non-P2L combat, this would be a good action. But if you want to DetailRP (Usually for P2L in this scenario, you have to describe what he is doing before and after the punch (without double-actioning) and how the punch looked, and felt, and what would happen if it connected)
A better action would be:
John doe licked his lips, quickly winding his arm back, and landing a clean punch to the kid in the flash suit's face, causing a sharp tingling sensation, and throbbing ache, as well as immediate redness if the hit landed. John then smiled, and shook off his hand, a sharp pain shooting through his knuckles. (The 'if the hit landed' part was courtesy, and means that there is no PowerRP going on.)
Why is this better though? Firstly, it adds some more detail to John's punch, and describes the effects of the punch, what John Doe feels after, and what he does before. But this is still not perfect.
An even better action would be:
John Doe licked his lips, the coppery tang of his own blood overwhelming his senses. He hadn't noticed his broken nose, which was starting to throb. His eyes widened, and he stared at the Flash impersonator, glaring daggers at him, his Jade eyes so filled with rage they looked like they were going to pop out at any second. He took a breath, wiping the blood off his face, before quickly winding his arm back and shooting it at the Flash Impersonator's cheek. His fist would connect with a sharp crack, causing the Flash Impersonator to feel an immediate throb in his face, which would be sore if the hit connected. He pulled his hand back, shaking the pain out, which came in waves. 'Tch' he muttered, his knuckles bloodied and bruised.
This action is (of course) not perfect, but paints a way better picture. There is a ton of information provided on exactly where his fist hits, and the effect of the punch. It also is very vivid, and describes smell, sight, feeling and uses forms of descriptive imagery to really fluff up the action.
I bolded the parts that make the attack dodgeable (for some reason)
A small tip from me is that you always want to think of "How can I make a sentence that uses pronouns the least?"
For example:
"His eyes glanced in the direction of his partner, a sigh escaping his lips as his smile turned to a grin."
This can instead turn to be:
"Green eyes moved to fall upon the person that he placed all trust in, a delicate sigh escaping chapped lips whilst they were pulled upwards into a brighter look, teeth presenting a show of sincerity."
For example:
"His eyes glanced in the direction of his partner, a sigh escaping his lips as his smile turned to a grin."
This can instead turn to be:
"Green eyes moved to fall upon the person that he placed all trust in, a delicate sigh escaping chapped lips whilst they were pulled upwards into a brighter look, teeth presenting a show of sincerity."
Just a small tip from myself is rather simple..
When detailrp'ing there are many things that you can do to improve realism and give you a better idea of what occurs..
LETS SAY YOU PUNCH A TEACHER (FOR EXAMPLE SORA MORI)
/me The person would dash towards the teacher, her fledgling outline shining like a gleaming spectre in a wide abyss that stalks the darkest of souls. Their skin reeked of the stench of fear and caution as their face became a picture of fluorescent elegance as their fist crumpled up like paper. Their eyes darted towards the magenta-haired menace of a teacher like a flurry of daggers yearning for the reward of blood. Their fist crushed against her face as they jumped back in instant denial and regret as his actions sank in like a crumbling apple pie being cut.
In that small detail, I didn't just do /me punches Sora. I attempted to capture the emotions of the person doing it through the quote ''Their skin reeked of the stench of fear''. This quote infers that the protagonist is sweating or worried about the consequences. This captures emotion. Or if you wanted to do in-depth detail, similar to that, you need to use adjectives to describe words to just add that extra layer! ( Also using pronouns in /me's at the start of sentences can be hard to avoid and if you ask me, I just add them anyways so I don't loose my mind.
Hope this helped!!
When detailrp'ing there are many things that you can do to improve realism and give you a better idea of what occurs..
LETS SAY YOU PUNCH A TEACHER (FOR EXAMPLE SORA MORI)
/me The person would dash towards the teacher, her fledgling outline shining like a gleaming spectre in a wide abyss that stalks the darkest of souls. Their skin reeked of the stench of fear and caution as their face became a picture of fluorescent elegance as their fist crumpled up like paper. Their eyes darted towards the magenta-haired menace of a teacher like a flurry of daggers yearning for the reward of blood. Their fist crushed against her face as they jumped back in instant denial and regret as his actions sank in like a crumbling apple pie being cut.
In that small detail, I didn't just do /me punches Sora. I attempted to capture the emotions of the person doing it through the quote ''Their skin reeked of the stench of fear''. This quote infers that the protagonist is sweating or worried about the consequences. This captures emotion. Or if you wanted to do in-depth detail, similar to that, you need to use adjectives to describe words to just add that extra layer! ( Also using pronouns in /me's at the start of sentences can be hard to avoid and if you ask me, I just add them anyways so I don't loose my mind.
Hope this helped!!
A tip from me is don’t think while you type. Let your fingers take control let them be your brain and mind. Thats what I do. Ik it might sound hard to do which can be understandable but it’s natural for me to do so.
lowkey, the way I personally DetailRP is by taking a simple action, and then adding as much descriptive words or a process for the action on which im trying to describe.. So instead of something like:
/me punches
try
/me balling up his fists, [Character] would raise his right hand towards their chest, then launching it forwards, targeting the left side of [character's] lower face area.
Just by doing that with each one of your actions could build up an easy paragraph of an action. Just by doing something like that to start and get your feet wet, you can build up and get more casual with Detailing your actions or even /it's and /my's
/me punches
try
/me balling up his fists, [Character] would raise his right hand towards their chest, then launching it forwards, targeting the left side of [character's] lower face area.
Just by doing that with each one of your actions could build up an easy paragraph of an action. Just by doing something like that to start and get your feet wet, you can build up and get more casual with Detailing your actions or even /it's and /my's
